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You work is again, pretty spot on, so most of what I have to say is going to be a little nit picky - but it's always good to keep the little things in mind, since they so often make a big impact on our work. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)" />

I think you're a little afraid of pushing your outer lines. Many of your outlines just don't push enough. I think if you thickened your outer edge line weights in most of your panels, you'd see that the characters and foreground elements pop out a lot more and really add depth to your art. I see you trying to do it in the last panel with that foreground bush, but I think you could still add more. The major problem area I see for this is in panel one where the lineweight on the bushes behind the character are actually heavier than the lineweight on the character. Do you see how pushing the lineweight on her would make it look more like she's in passing in front of the bush?

The only other problem I see is that the positioning of the panels on the door look a bit off.

Anyhow, that's about it for now. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)" /> The page looks really good, you've done such a great job at all the little background details. I don't know what there is not to like, really.